Tuesday's NaiSaiKu Challenge

Time again for the NaiSaiKu Challenge. A poem built a little like a haiku, but different. The title is in the middle.

lost in the blackness,
alone with thoughts all jumbled,
slumber does not come,
TROUBLES OF THE MIND
slumber’s fickle muse,
alone with thoughts all jumbled,
absorbed by blackness

10 comments:

Janet Jarrell said...

Yes. Although your thoughts are all jumbled, it is easy to understand. Thank goodness you are a writer...

gigidiaz said...

Those dark tumbling hours are always the worse.

Sophie said...

Awesome, feelings we can all relate to, the form fits them well!

PS - I grew up in South Dakota so am enjoying the familiarity of places and things in your Tweets.

lostmermaid said...

At this moment, i can relate to it !! (its 2 AM by my watch right now ;) )

Stan Ski said...

I know the feeling. I've always been a light sleeper...or perhaps a heavy thinker???

Andy Sewina said...

I think the trick is to stop thinking (easier said than done) and then you fall asleep!

Nicely!

Dr. Marc Latham said...

I've had a few of those nights, and congratulations and thanks for capturing their essence in a few lines.

Just someone said...

NaiSaiKu Challenge looks hard and you make it seem so easy:); great work!

Just someone said...

NaiSaiKu Challenge looks hard and you make it seem so easy:); great work!

Just someone said...

NaiSaiKu Challenge looks hard and you make it seem so easy:); great work!