Monday's Fiction in 58

Fiction in 58 is something I came up with to test ways to write tight, but write smart. With description. Sometimes, it works. Sometimes it fails. Still, it's a good exercise.

Fearless

“There’s a certain risk, I think, to live fearlessly,” she says
Mosquitoes awaken from the cooling grass, buzz overhead; tequila shots warm in the sun, which sets slowly, blazing a last colorful trail.
“There’s a certain risk to living, period,” he says.
“Yeah, but fearlessly. For yourself. Unburdened and alive.”
He slides his sunglasses down and in that moment, wishes.

2 comments:

PurestGreen said...

"tequila shots warm in the sun." This is like a springboard for the whole scene. I love it.

gs batty said...

this may sound stupid but I'm not sure where this is coming from but it grows on me every time I read it. Been back here 4 times. I know I get to make my own interpretation so I'll take it where I want to. Dam I hate it when I have to think.