Wednesday's Three Word Wednesday

The word prompts over at Three Word Wednesday are intimate, river and waiting. Another Drabble? Yeah, 100 words, coming up:

Life Like a River

His discontent was a river, wide and deep.

His life flowed like driftwood on the current; on the surface, gone in turbid whitewater. Habitually stuck in the reeds waiting for the next nudge of current to get him back into slipstream.

Mostly, mostly, his days meandered in the placid flow. He woke before his alarm, brushed, flossed, ate sensibly, commuted. On his return, he ate sensibly, read books, dusted. A decent bedtime.

There, in the darkness, he’d hit the rapids. Heart-pounding angst. Tears, snot-filled gasps. His wish from the swirl of his life?

The chance encounter, a touch, intimate.

9 comments:

gautami tripathy said...

This is goo. I have read a few of your 100 words stories and I like the way you have done those. Not easy to constrain oneself this way!

Keep doing it!

TC said...

Habitually stuck in the reeds waiting for the next nudge of current to get him back into slipstream.

I think we all feel like that sometimes? Or maybe it's just me?

b said...

This is wonderful. I love flash fiction and write at a site called The Scrawl. You might want to post your stories there too.

http://www.scrawlers.com/users/109-Barbara

b

pjd said...

Your writing is so compact. A joy to read.

tumblewords said...

Wow! I recognize the rapids.

Joyce said...

Poor guy! I feel sorry for him. :(

Greyscale Territory said...

Adore the image of "nudge of current".

But best of all, love how the images are scrunched into an overwhelming question. The 100 word answer to T.S.Eliot.

Pam said...

Sometimes the most wonderful things can happen when you are stuck in the reeds. I really like this short short story.

Rio said...

"Snot-filled gasps", wow. That was awesome! This is such a deep piece in its brevity. What talent you have!