The NaisaiKu.. Challenge

It’s been a lot of time spent in a hospital room this week – pop’s got a staph infection, but is much better, thanks – so The Tension has suffered a bit. My apologies to my early bird readers.

I thought I’d take the NaisaiKu.. Challenge. A NaisaiKu.. is usually made up of two Haiku length poems, the second being a reverse order or mirror image of the first with a CAPITALIZED TITLE inserted between them. Andy Sewina tries to build his in 17 syllables or less for each three line stanza.

Let’s give er’ a whirl:

Friends dance on edges,
dip their toes in swirling lust,
bliss, flesh, laughter, smiles
BLISS, FLESH, LAUGHTER, SMILES
dip their toes in swirling lust,
friends dance on the edges

6 comments:

SweetTalkingGuy.. said...

Hi Thom, this is so fresh and reminds me of my disco days, I remember the girls, dancing round their handbags...
-Andy

Wendy Naisa said...

Hiya, ThomG, many thanks for taking the NaisaiKu.. Challenge! this week.

I love the line 'dip their toes in swirling lust' - it conjures up a whole host of images for me.

ande said...

Ohhhhh pretty!

spacedlaw said...

I remember the whirling sensation.

Beloved Dreamer said...

Nice image. May I join you?????



love-bd

Sepiru Chris said...

Nice twist on the format.