This is a Fiction in 58, a story in just 58 words. An interesting exercise to try out – quickly – ideas, description, thoughts. If you’d like, play along. Try it, then shoot me a link to your Fi58.
Moving Day
The simple black carry-on sat by the door, an obedient cur.
She moved through the loft in silence, gathering treasured bits and pieces of their life together. She’d left her shoes off; no sense in taking chances.
Only when the cab arrived did she dare peek. The note was pinned to her scented pillow.
It simply said, “Enough.”
- ThomG
- Thom Gabrukiewicz is both a communicator and a writer of flash fiction. Most of what he writes is kind of dark, with occasional forays into the light. He’s a winner of some awards and has covered two Winter Olympics. He’s also written a guidebook about hiking with dogs. He’s fiercely loyal and has a malevolent side that seems to visit less and less. He’s both a hopeless romantic and a realist. He's currently working on community wellness issues in Wyoming.
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4 comments:
great phrase... 'obedient cur'.
You say so much in 58 words.
Then again, she said so much in just that one word: Enough.
I love these controlled feedings. Just enough mystery to drive you mad. Just enough certainty to satisfy.
Oh yes, very good. Very to the point.
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