Monday. Fiction. 58.

This is a Fiction in 58, a story in just 58 words. An interesting exercise to try out – quickly – ideas, description, thoughts. If you’d like, play along. Try it, then shoot me a link to your Fi58.

Moving Day
The simple black carry-on sat by the door, an obedient cur.
She moved through the loft in silence, gathering treasured bits and pieces of their life together. She’d left her shoes off; no sense in taking chances.
Only when the cab arrived did she dare peek. The note was pinned to her scented pillow.
It simply said, “Enough.”

4 comments:

quin browne said...

great phrase... 'obedient cur'.

TC said...

You say so much in 58 words.

Then again, she said so much in just that one word: Enough.

missalister said...

I love these controlled feedings. Just enough mystery to drive you mad. Just enough certainty to satisfy.

svojoh said...

Oh yes, very good. Very to the point.