Fiction in 58, a story in small packaging

The exercise is called Fiction in 58; write a story using just 58 words. I made it up, because it sounded cool.

Under Pressure
A brisk wind cancels out the labored breath as he runs - a pre-morning ritual meant to clear his thoughts.
The swirl of tension from the world - cosmic forces or otherwise - weigh heavy, sacks of cement pressed to his chest.
“Time heals all wounds,” he announces to the darkness.
It’s the scars, he thinks, that linger, change perception.


lissa said...

I like the idea of a story in 58 words, it's much harder, I think

this is a specific moment, the man seem quite stress but he knew maybe in the back of his mind, as he said those words, he really didn't think it was true

Quin Browne said...

it's always the scars