Sunday Scribblings, "Anticipate"

The prompt over at Sunday Scribblings is “anticipate.”

Anticipate
She stood by a weathered fencepost at the crossroads of two gravel roads, the heat waves glistening on an already hot and humid morning.
She wore blue-and-white flip-flops with plastic daisies on the toe straps. Dust covered her toes, dulling the electric-blue nail polish.
A simple sundress covered her bony frame, the yellow of the dress giving her skin a sullen glow.
At her feet, a half-full, wrinkled brown paper sack, the top folded and creased with care.
Her gaze never wavered; she kept a keep eye to the west, waiting for the dust plume to grow between the rows of corn that stretched for miles.
The plume meant freedom, in the form of a big silver bus with a stretched-out black dog on it.
She sun made her squint.
The black eye, already shifting into rich greens and purples, made her wince.
The gray-brown cloud, just a speck now on the horizon, made her smile, ever so slightly.

Comments

Serena Shay said…
Good for her for getting to the bus! I hope she gets on. :)

Nice job!
Dee Martin said…
aw I can see her all brave, chin jutting out defiant. Makes me hope she makes it. Loved the descriptiveness down to the flip flops and dusty nail polish.
quin browne said…
you paint a great picture, thom...
George S Batty said…
you always spin a great tale. well done
sundaycynce said…
SUPER descriptive detail---shoes, toe nails, dress, skin and black eye. I too hope she makes it.
Nice writing, Thom.
I love reading such detailed posts. It takes right there!

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missalister said…
Nice character sketch, bro. Feels good to get out of there at last, maybe do some healing, go to a new Walmart and get me some different colors, maybe put some meat on my dusty bones, I don’t know, but something.
Beth said…
Lots of energy in your stuff overall, but this piece pulled me in with its taut description and heartbreaking honesty. Nice short against domestic violence and very creative. Thanks for visiting.

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