The words over at Three Word Wednesday are darkness, patronize and weaken.
The Path
The voice cries out from the darkness,
Angry and stalking,
It weakens my resolve,
To stay true,
To the path that cuts the gloom,
The tangled webs,
The dark hearts,
The crushed dreams,
The howls yet grow stronger,
And still I walk,
Through the valley of the shadow,
Determined not to stumble,
As the shrill voice patronizes,
The choices,
The desires,
The life,
The very path I choose to follow
- ThomG
- Thom Gabrukiewicz is both a communicator and a writer of flash fiction. Most of what he writes is kind of dark, with occasional forays into the light. He’s a winner of some awards and has covered two Winter Olympics. He’s also written a guidebook about hiking with dogs. He’s fiercely loyal and has a malevolent side that seems to visit less and less. He’s both a hopeless romantic and a realist. He's currently working on community wellness issues in Wyoming.
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25 comments:
It is so difficult to stay true to that path. The demons are always stalking - usually inside.
Great words.
This piece hits very close to home. Thanks for sharing it.
That's why we need to be picky about the paths we walk upon.
Loved how you brought the words together in this piece.
Yes, it is like this, isn't it! Well done!
Your words drip imagery. Very intense poem, the tension and resolve come to life.
And you say you don't write much poetry. Love how it builds up
Ah, Thom, this is a particularly poignant and powerful piece of poetry. That very path. Yes!
WOW! Boy do I relate. Very well written!!
I love the defiance. This reminds me of 'Invictus' a bit in that regard. Your "voice" rings differently, with less anger.
At least to me...Great write, Thom.
very much like a prayer but with determination
It takes great courage to stick to one's path!
The determination emotion shows up through these words!
Have a great day:)
oh, thom... it's amazing.
you do write well my lord. Old Grizz salutes your path your stubbornness to remain upon it
Suuuppeerb
Thanks for this. It's hard to keep to one's own path with so many people insisting that their way is the only way.
I hope you're feeling better!
Damn those inner editors! Ever they stalk us, and never will they leave us alone!
I hope you feel better soon. The flu sucks.
Constructive criticism: Uncharacteristically (it's the flu talking no doubt) you relied on cliches in a couple of places (tangled webs, crushed dreams). But still a good piece!
It's not easy to always follow the truth. There are many hurdles and people to pull us down.
i take it that the voice crying out is an inner voice, the one that you cannot escape and to the resolve to stay without wavering, it all hits close to home.
Sometimes we have to ignore the knockers.
Love this, just love it.
good thoughts.
b
Many a times I feel to be chased by I know not what!
I just recovered from flu. Hope you did too!
patronising darkness weakens me
Very eloquent description of life's struggles. The dark/light, the good/bad, righteousness/indulgence.
those temptations to stray from the path we choose...oooh how I know their call!
The Flu really gets your mind flowing Thom!
great job!
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